Word Prompt Story – Miniature Planet

This piece was selected to be featured on Marsha Ingrao’s Story Chat. Always Write.

This piece was written in response to the Blog Battle prompt word of ‘miniature’.

It was not the way that Geoffrey Owen Davies had envisaged his retirement working out. A career public servant, he’d not just survived but thrived with the arrival of technology and the privatisation of government services via the anodyne sounding PPP (Public Private Partnerships). He made it to the finish line with his home paid for, a secure income from his superannuation for life and some untraceable accounts in the Caymans. His wife had left some years ago and was now shacked up with a mutual colleague who apparently offered more excitement and sense of adventure. That suited Geoffrey just fine.

Never a keen gardener in the past, growing had now become an obsession, albeit one with an emphasis on orderliness and strict boundaries. Over time, his wife’s penchant for eclectic planting had turned much of their modestly-sized garden into a jungle; a riot of randomness that offended his eye and troubled his soul. For the sake of not appearing to go senile, he retained some of the roses and the odd agapanthus but the rest he unmercifully uprooted and replaced with what he saw as useful raised beds of vegetables and fruit trees in large pots.

Of course he could not eat even a small proportion of the seasonal harvests, so he gave most of it away to initially grateful (and then later inwardly groaning and discretely binning) neighbours. Having used every square inch of arable land he owned (including what had previously been lawn), he had now taken advantage of the street gardening movement to colonise the verge in front of his home. He grew mostly herbs that he imagined passers-by would gratefully snip off to add to their evening meal. He even had a pair of scissors on a string hanging from a street tree. (Geoffrey had failed to observe that most of his neighbours still worked, rarely cooked and never walked anywhere.)

When Mrs. Kafoops at No. 23 was taken into a nursing home, her grandson moved into her house, along with a few of his mates, allegedly with the brief to maintain the house and garden until such time as the house was sold. As vision-impaired Freddie could have predicted, that part of the contract was never met. The parties until dawn started and most of Mrs. K’s armchairs and couches ended up permanently residing on the increasingly weed-infested front and back lawns.

Geoffrey had never been comfortable with conflict and, unlike his neighbours, he hadn’t called the Police and he had refused to sign a petition that was circulating, designed to have the lads removed.

However there came a fateful day when a line was crossed and Geoffrey would never be the same again. One morning he was doing his rounds, inspecting his crops, when he stopped in his tracks. He stood gazing in horror at the carnage in his herb bed on the verge, clearly created by vehicles possessed by those attending the latest booze-and-drug-driven bacchanal at No. 23.

He walked briskly back inside and, as he sipped a cup of chamomile tea to calm his rarely disturbed nerves, he began to coldly map out his dish of revenge, followed by world domination (or at least that part of the world that comprised the street on which he lived).

Well aware that even the most meticulously planned strategies rarely survive the first exchange with the enemy, he allowed for some flexibility on the sequencing but he knew that success depended on two key factors: contacts and anonymity. He congratulated himself on not having engaged in the mob rule tactics of his neighbours, including their futile attempts to seek firm Police action. That would potentially have left a trail to his door.

Crucial to his plan were his contacts within the building industry and local government. Mysterious deliveries of gravel and sand began appearing in the driveway of No.23, blocking their cars in (or out as the case may be). The Council health inspector discovered an infestation of rats emanating from the premises. A ‘routine’ visit from the building inspector discovered termites were threatening the structural safety of the building. Police responded to an anonymous tip-off from union sources that the body of a victim of a factional dispute was buried in the backyard.

When Mrs. Kafoops’ lawyer was contacted by the representative of a buyer (protected by commercial-in confidence) with a half-way reasonable offer, they hastened to accept (while quietly wondering who this nutter could be). The grandson and his mates vanished from the scene.

Over the next few years, Geoffrey picked off his less desirable neighbours one by one. After the party boys came Cactus Man, with his front garden resembling the Mojave Desert and, shortly afterwards, the young people who believed the perfect garden involved red tanbark and gravel and a ‘classic car’ parked on it while it awaited restoration that never seemed to commence.

With each acquisition, he transformed its garden into the orderly and productive space it should always have been. His shelf-company corporation engaged agents to let the properties to people screened for their green fingers and their lack of desire to split asunder what God (or Geoffrey in this case) had put together. Any transgressions were met with instant eviction, encouraged along by men with many tattoos and few teeth.

A decade from the commencement of his Crusade, Geoffrey felt confident in claiming victory. He had created a miniature planet which was quiet, ordered, productive and civilised. His street verge gardens fed and flavoured the surrounding streets, which had now become highly desirable moons orbiting around his world.

More than one PhD had been written about this phenomenon and various theories emerged as to how it had been achieved. Needless to say, none of them ventured down the path of speculating that this may have been the work of a benevolent dictator, drawing on the detritus of social democracy to create a new branch of social hygiene. And Geoffrey would take his secrets to the grave.

23 thoughts on “Word Prompt Story – Miniature Planet

  1. Lots of sly humor in this one! I immediately noticed that Geoff’s initials spelled GOD and wondered how that would play into the story, which it most certainly did. The series of events that befell the pesky grandson were quite droll, and I loved the bit about later ‘transgressors’ being evicted by men with many tattoos and few teeth. Geoff’s behind the scenes commandeering by establishing an essentially ‘covenant’ neighborhood was a nice touch in carrying through on the god motif. The vision-impaired Freddie in paragraph four perplexed me somewhat – is that an Aussie allusion I’m not familiar with? Another enjoyable piece!

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    • Many thanks, AE. Always satisfying when someone picks up on the allusions. I thought ‘Blind Freddie’ – the ‘vision-impaired’ part was to meet the needs of modern political political correctness 😉 -was an expression that had travelled further than our shores. Blind Freddie NOUN Australian informal – an imaginary person representing the highest degree of incompetence (esp. in the phrase ‘Blind Freddie could see that!’) Collins English Dictionary.

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  2. Made it to the finish line with home paid for…very sobering line Doug. Life’s wheel summing up the best years working to pay for a house and accrue a certain cash fluidity to the age where, with good fortune, still allows time and health to do something…. not that GOD…had to chuckle reading that acronym on Abes comment… let any dust settle. Clearly a planner with dictatorial tendencies… fabulous concept. Meticulous, no “paper trail” and enough hedge funds to acquire his miniature planet and turn it into a clone of his own Good Life… ever see that old tv series? Turn all productive space into self sufficiency. Of course if neighbours keep disappearing no doubt fertiliser could be sourced from a more sinister edge.

    Great story and cracking concep.

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    • Many thanks, Gary. Yes, I remember The Good Life. Always struck me as terribly twee and sanctimonious. Perhaps Geoffrey could have sourced his own version of Soylent Green from a hedge fund. Boom-tish 😉 Not being GOD I can only fantasise about that amount of wealth.

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      • I think that sums up much of 70,s sitcoms Doug. Possibly reflective of societies mindset at the time which was, apparently, “normal.” Whatever that is ha, ha. Oddly I cannot think of the word God without seeing Morgan Freeman in my head. Something to do with the line, A Random act of Kindness. Now that would be a truly good social norm to base the world on!

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  3. Haha, this was great, Doug! The logical part of my mind says that we shouldn’t celebrate Geoffrey’s actions, yet a darker, inner part of me secretly rooted (pun intended) for him. Although I fear I would be evicted if I were a neighbour of his! I think we’ve all got a bit of Geoffrey in us. He started out so nice — with scissors on offer to snip some veggies up. A product of his environment, perhaps. Flawlessly written, as ever.

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